Keep trying
So... you first post... OK..... not new, not revealer... one more submission on NG
Keep trying, you can do better....
To get attention you need create something new or choreography more interesting .
You need worry more about smoother movements, and frame rate.
Before you understand this, you will be prepared to put a good sequel.
This is a tip... I put my first animation on NG at the beginning of this year and I practice everyday to make a better animation sequel. But I think too this depends of your interest.
If you are satisfied... fine. But, if you wish attention... is a long way.
2/5 - To more one submission
6/10 - To your first post